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Day in the Life of Heavy

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Monsterrabbi654
The story was good, and I liked the writing style. It was interesting how you tied in characters like zhanna that were from the comics vs the actual game.

Only thing I could say that would be bad, is that the story is short, and it seems like effort was put into it, but just for one day. It is a 72 hour contest. I would like to see an expanded version of this (Not that I'm much of a fanfic nut) but maybe, just write longer stories.

I dunno what I'm saying, just do you
Tasty Salamanders
Tasty Salamanders
Thanks for the review. Yeah, unfortunately the story ended up being shorter than I would have liked it to be. I wasn't able to take full advantage of the full 72 hours due to other stuff going on (work and such), though I guess this would be true of other people too.
I guess my lack of experience showed, if I had more writing experience perhaps I would have more effectively used the time I had. I should practice for next time.

I felt that I could have expanded upon Heavy's interactions with the team, especially with Soldier and Zhanna. There was an idea to include Sniper towards the end, but it wasn't included due to time and being a bit worried about the story feeling cluttered.
DemoN K!ng
10/10 would read this again
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