The Short Anecdote Of The Origin Of The Machina's Tracer Rounds And Name 2017-02-13

[Languste]

The Short Anecdote Of The Origin Of The Machina's Tracer Rounds And Name - Short story about the "Machina"

This short story is a fanfiction about why the Machina is as it is! I hope you enjoy it!

~ ur friendly lobster c:

 

[LeSwordfish]

It's not bad, but keep an eye on your run-on sentences, you've got some very long sentences.

 

[Languste]

It's not bad, but keep an eye on your run-on sentences, you've got some very long sentences.

Thanks for your reply It is pretty much the first time I wrote such a story, I am no native speaker But next time I could make less complicated sentences and a more "compact" text leaving out unnecessary information