Death Ray

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  1. Brits

    Brits L1: Registered

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    Death Ray

    Hey, so this is my first attempt in mapping. Death Ray is an alpine(-ish) themed KOTH map, which takes place around the control tower of the deadliest death ray.

    Current version: A3

    To do:
    • Reconsidering/rebuilding the structure of the central building. Removing windows and giving some props for scouts to get to the upper platform if necessary.
    • A tower on the top of the central building, some effects (inspired by this)
    • More optimization
    • And the usual stuff, better lights, textures, etc...

    Any feedback is welcome. ;)
     
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  2. archy

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    wow thats the first time that i REALLY like how an A1 looks like. considering that there are still dev textures, i still think that it looks awesome and like fun.

    probably the most convincing a1 that i have ever seen, especially KOTH, a game mode that i personally do not like very much. in fact, this is one of the few maps that could make KOTH fun for ME. i do not map for ages however... but still awesome. gj
     
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  3. Grim Tuesday

    aa Grim Tuesday

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    GREAT brushwork, cant wait to see how it plays!
     
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  4. Terwonick

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    better than most A1's seen here. (congrats on the 1000th post) I keep trying to find sightlines, but their are none/in the pictures)
     
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  5. Mr.Blob

    Mr.Blob L8: Fancy Shmancy Member

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    From what I can see, those grain-tubes leading to the point building don't lead into anywhere! It's good idea, using them as a walkway but when you come to detailing, keep in mind that something should be passing through, inside them.

    Other than that it's looking great! - I love inside the cap building. it's very clean. :D

    Edit: the light props inside the point building look rather repetitive. Try using less / different props.
     
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  6. absurdistof

    aa absurdistof

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    Unususal, but solid layout. Very very solid. All I'm going to say is that I think the back areas of the overhead could use a bit added to them.
     
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  7. Brits

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    Wow! Thanks guys, i didn't expect this. :)

    Yeah, I'm aware of the tubes not leading anywhere, planned to fix that during detailing, but now I think the sooner the better.

    I'm going to fix the light props for the next version, thanks for the comment. ;)

    I'm very sorry, it must be my lack of English knowledge, but I just can't understand, what you mean. :(

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    Thanks again for the feedbacks. :)
     
  8. Attsy

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    Im loving the look of this map. I dont like the exit signs in the cap building. Looks kinda silly, especially if there on the other side as well.

    I think that sight line on the third screen shot might be a problem as well, the one from one side of the map to the other, cant really tell with out playing the map.

    Also you should totally make that tesla tower on top of the building. Something simpler with out all those windows but make it none the less. It would be awesome and a fantastic landmark. Right now it just looks like a evil billionaires hideout, who didn't have enough money for a dooms day device.
     
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  9. tyler

    aa tyler snail prince, master of a ruined tower

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    Once you optimize this I'll stick it on my group's "playtest this" list. It's not a regular occurrence or anything, but I keep it up to date and many of the maps go into rotation. I like this map a lot from the screenshots -- would love to play it.

    Optimization isn't too hard, it's just complex and requires a little thought. Once you figure it out, it's smooth sailing.
     
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  10. REEJ

    REEJ L7: Fancy Member

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    Good and sane looking KOTH
    Sir, you are chosen for the mission impossible

    Looking forward to seeing this on gameday
     
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  11. honorum646

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    The areas around the central building could be a bit too large from the what I see, but otherwise I enjoy the fancy brushwork and interesting height you have going on.

    Also, to recap what Spank said, the courtyard is a bit too open from that ledge on the far wall, perhaps putting some additional cover (maybe a shed with some health/ammo) would lower the power of that area.
     
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  12. Da_Man

    Da_Man L4: Comfortable Member

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    Holy shit this looks awesome. It looks really nice from an a1 perspective. Throw it up for gameday, I wanna see how this plays.
     
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  13. Brits

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    Hey, thanks again for your feedback. :) I'm at home again and able work on this.

    I've been experimenting with covers and avoiding sightlines, but I didn't really managed to build anything, that I'm satisfied with. Actually, I'm thinking of leaving the layout in this state, and submit the map for gameday, and we'll see how it works, is that sightline on the third screenshot really bad, what are the actual main problems, etc.

    I've done some optimization, though. It must be pretty lame yet, but the compile time has decreased from ~4 hours to ~40 minutes, and I has experienced better ingame speed (from 30-50 fps to 50-70 fps). Will be better...

    Expect A2 release soon!;)
     
  14. Brits

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    Okay, so A2 is released..

    After all, instead of adding something to the map, I've found more details, which can be a problem later, and I have an other two weeks away from Hammer.. :( So A2 is the optimized version of A1.

    I'm going to submit it for gameday soon.
     
  15. Moose

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    [​IMG]

    floodlight spam!

    Map does look nice though, can't wait to play it in gameday.
     
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  16. Brits

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    Gameday bump.
    Looking forward for your feedback! ;)
     
  17. Pc_Madness

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    I really like this map, but might be worthwhile to lower the cap building a bit, the ramps up to it are incredibly steep. And a route to get to the upstairs balcony inside the cap building from the inside would be nice as well. I think you had some sightline issues directly out of spawn where you can see from one side of the map to the other.
     
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  18. LeSwordfish

    aa LeSwordfish semi-trained quasi-professional

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    Lower the cap building a bit, yeah. maybe lower the thing with the cap on as well. i kept shooting myself becuse my rockets hit it, and people on the cap have noticable vertical advantage.

    The cap also needs more health, at the moment the team with a medic on the cap wins. I'd suggest a pair of small healthpacks on each level.

    maybe something in the middle of the top layer, like a hanging bank of screens. this would make fighting on the top layer a bit more interesting. It also breaks up the sightline, literally from one corner of the map to another through those top doors.
     
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  19. Pc_Madness

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    Yeah I noticed that as well, but it did make for handy cover. Last thing you want is for people to use the doorways as cover and just spam onto the point.
     
  20. Brits

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    Thanks for your feedback! ;)

    Well, A3 is released!

    I've lowered the main building with 64 units, we'll see that's enough. I've lowered the cap zone and the outer buildings as well...

    I've changed the tube, because of changing the heights and finding that kind of tube not so authentic.. :p I know it would be better if it was a prop, but I have no experiences in modelling.. same with the tesla coil over the capture point. Yes, that ugly thing is supposed to be a tesla coil...